Sound Exchange

Background Update
I finally painted a background that I like!!! The buildings are detailed with washes of color and some bricks and windows. For this shot, the sky is changing from sunset to nighttime to sunrise, with the sun and moon rotating like they're on a spinning wheel. The clouds, stars, and birds will be coming in and out from outside the frame.
The buildings don't change color at all and I think it still works. I know I said I would adding a bunch of lineart to my backgrounds but for this shot, it made the buildings feel smaller than I want them to. I think this will look REALLY good all pixelly!!!! I'm so excited to draw it with my special brush!!!

Sound Exchange
Jesu and I partnered up for this homework assignment, which was to exchange detailed feedback on what we would do with each other's soundtracks. He was super generous with his feedback and I feel so hopeful now that I have clear ideas for what to do next!

Here is the list of advice from Jesu (and I will be implementing all of it):

Sound

• Slight amb during title screen
• Add footsteps for friend (shot 1)
• Slight amb on bathroom scene (faucet water drops!!!)
• Lorraine should be audibly crying while she runs home
• More sniffles when she’s crying in the bathroom
• The toy sword sound (the SFX of ladybugs hitting the mirror): repeat it in different pitches to reflect the ladybugs hitting the mirror at dif angles OR foley it by dropping a mix of mini m&ms and regular m&ms on a mirror
• More whimpering when she’s in bed
• City soundscape during sky transition scene (cars, etc), bird chirps for the sunrise
• Lorraine should scream (garbled) off-screen before she starts running out the door
  
• Thud on grass spot fx
• Cars driving by in distance when Lorraine is laying in grass
• Black screen: to show the passage of time, show either in SFX or in a new shot Lorraine driving away in a van/truck and the cityscape gets quieter
• Last scene with Lorraine's happy ending, the bugs should be much quieter than the music

Edit

• Add a lot more pauses.
  
• First close up of Lorraine: have her blow onto coffee​
• Add a couple seconds on her licking her tear, exaggerate the movement
• Have Lorraine open her mouth in the bathroom a lot slower, show her being scared to open her mouth. Have a lot of tension BEFORE she finally opens her mouth
• Sky transition scene: have it move like one of those kids toys that spin into different animal sounds (love this advice)
• When Lorraine is waking up: have her eyes flicker a little bit and she should be smiling BEFORE she wakes up and realizes her reality. Then when her eyes open the SFX should be glass cracking
• Have Lorraine look both ways before crossing the street
• Lorraine should cough on the ground and cough up a couple more bugs
• Lorraine should go :o before smiling in her Epiphany
• During the shot of Lorraine's epiphany, show the ladybug finishing up the Aphid